Music, the ancient language...
Group: Musicians
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Posted: April 20 2003, 18:09 |
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Trying to work with the idees of the Master (and not his most easy-listening ones), kinda risky...
I don't like the ending of your 'first part', at 1:40, when you play the melody loud and then you stop. But I have to admit, I think if I had to make it, I would do something similar. There's not much choice if you want to put your second part behind it. Start immediatly like in Amarok would mess things up, and developping the melody to a more suitable ending wouldn't be appropriate for a contribution project...
I like the part that follows though. It's worth sacrificing the ending of the previous part to introduce this one. I like the drums!
From 2:49 on, you don't get the chords right, I think. It sounds a bit strange if you're used to Amarok.
At 3:21 you introduce the same 'disturbing' (for the outer world of course ) stresses as Mike does. Here, it hasn't the same contrast anymore with the soft, gentle background as it does in the original, but it still does its job. It still catches the spirit.
At 5:15, when 'la finale' starts (it rocks btw! ), I wouldn't re-use the cimbals any further then the start. Don't know why, matter of taste I guess. The chord at 5:27 sounds weird again, but for the rest the final ending is great!
It seems I've many complains here , but I think it's only because I'm comparing it with the original. But the fact that I make the comparison is good news on itself, isn't it!
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